Matt Bellamy

Haha, awesome! Nice use of the word circumnavigate. :P There should be an apostrophe in F.R.E.D's Robotic Pad, but psshh, as if I can find anything else to complain about ...

Hello! You do a good job here of creating a gloomy mood, so well done. There are just a couple of things I think could be improved: it almost feels ...

Hello! I think this poem has potential - there is plenty of imagery you can build upon. However, it seems a little unfinished. I mean, the ending kinda sounds like ...

Hi! This starts off well, sounding like a diary at first. The first sentence is very blunt and draws the reader in. However, from there, you switch tenses a couple ...

Hello! This piece has potential. I think it's really good that you wrote it in present tense because it makes the reader feel more like they're really there. In the ...

Hi there! I like this, but I think it suffers from a lack of punctuation. Commas help readers read your work and allow them to take pauses, and I think ...

Hi! This is very interesting. I like how you detail all the things that the picture reminds you of. I'd like to see more of an explanation of why you ...

This is light-hearted and cute. What I particularly like about it is that it is a good haiku in the sense that it takes a moment in time, a scene, ...

Hi! I like that you created a sort of metaphor here, but I think it could be better. I mean, what if you didn't say religion at all? It's just ...

Hi Biffle! I like this. You use very good description. However, the -- at the end of every line were a bit off-putting. I think there might be some instances ...

Hi! I like your rhetorical questions in this poem, and the emotion in it. However I have a couple of suggestions - firstly, try splitting it up into seperate stanzas, ...

Hello! This is interesting. There are bits I like and bits I don't, so let's have a look. Golden locks A little cliché. Grass green eyes, Better, more original. A ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS. Don't forget to review other people's work, and then you'll get more reviews too. :) I quite like these, particularly the first poem. It reminds me ...

Hi! I like this but I have a few suggestions for re-wording. "I don’t know why The reason why it rains" I don't think you need to say why twice ...

Hi! I really like this - it's very well written, good description, and it flowed very well. It also rhymed well and wasn't forced at all. Again and wind don't ...